Raven has a proper thumb now (as well as an ear, lighting, etc) – the rest of the reformatting was a mix of careful tweaks (Tantek’s head in panel four, for example) and “awww, fuck it!” (most of the rest of the page, really). The hard split between Raven and Tantek (turning what was panel four and five in the first edition into panel four in this edition) was just that – hard. Unlike the panel split removed from the previous page, this one was laid out that way from the very beginning… so reforming into one panel involved substantial reconstruction.

Mechanical photoshop? I’ve got some skills. Artsy-fartsy photoshop? Not so much. Fortunately, the Second Edition calls for lots of technical heavy lifting, and not much of the other stuff. :D

Also, just between you and me? Executive Order 571.3 didn’t exist until a week or so ago, development-wise. It not only plugs a massive, massive plot hole, it foreshadows a whole bunch of structural goodness that has developed since this scene was first written (a million billion years ago). The WGP “wiggle room” is also new for the second edition… and if I can keep my wits about me for the duration, you’ll see how that plays out later in the story.

Mastering notes, 2016.12.06 – Minor dialogue adjustments.