This is technically the fourth pass over this scene. “Sketch” edition, “Crap” edition, 3×4 edition, 6×9 edition… the fact that this page and the last haven’t needed much in the way of work is one hell of a bonus for me, really. Straight ports for both, with new, slightly-reworded words. Words I may change later, in favor of something a bit more expositional and a bit less…. French.
Mastering notes, 2016.12.06 – Minor dialogue adjustments.