I’d originally intended to have another exterior shot at the top, spreading the dialogue (between Greymalkin and Rayne) across both pages. But that didn’t work very well – fortunately, moving the PA from the horrible in-panel effect of the previous version into black space has worked out nicely. I think this composition is in some ways stronger than the original version.
Mastering notes, 2016.12.06 – Expanded NBE, thinning out the acronym soup a bit so that the reader knows what Greymalkin’s talking about.