Composition’s been clarified a bit, environment replaced. It’s a bit prettier, I think. One massive continuity change – the big overlay panel of Xand has been corrected. Yhe plugs and covers on her shoulder mount have been removed. Since, yanno, she’s removing them in the previous panel. As usual, there’s been a fairly thorough scrubdown of the rest of the page – a few other continuity tweaks, etc. I would have done more, but the way I reformatted this one kind of shoots major surgery in the ass. Fortunately!
The one big downside to Xand overhearing the discussion is that the scene originally took place over the span of several hours…. and now, several minutes. It screws with the pacing a bit, but I’d like to think that it will pay off in the long run.