Too bad sarcasm and contempt work so much better in voice*- this page is positively dripping with both, forming a thick layer of frosting on the Exposition Cake.

Art-wise, this is still the definitive shot of Andreissen… and I’ve done a wee bit of cleanup work on Grij in the bottom panel, removing a snip of shade that didn’t need to be there and adding in a bit of highlight that did. It’s an awkward shot and could, under different circumstances, merit a redraw.

I think it’s pretty obvious that the Captain and the General can’t stand each other, in either edition – if anything, they’re more obvious about it this time around. In the hands of another writer this could be played up as the lead-in to some kind of focus-stealing romance… fortunately (for all of us!) they really do hate each other. Thus, smoochies get to happen between other characters, at another time.

* Especially an Alan Rickman or David Warner voice, which Grij is presently speaking in.


Mastering notes, 2016.12.06 – Minor dialogue adjustments.

Cast

  • Captain Soleina Andreissen

    While General Grij commands the Sabrosa‘s Addicaines, Captain Andreissen is in charge of the rest of the boat. Or rather, she was. She’s been in an exceptionally sour mood since Heirotus CEO Brandon James...

  • General Grij

    The ranking officer aboard HX-47 Sabrosa, Grij is the supervisor and final authority for all paramilitary field operations and training in which the vessel is assigned. The former Director of Applied Psionics Research for...