Convergence -12-

Replaced the first panel to match with the environment of the previous pages. More blue balances with the diagnostics thinger quite nicely, I think. Also, this “gearing up” sequence is no longer dialogue-free filler, thanks to the aforementioned bugs. I felt like such a smug bastard when I omitted Raven’s briefing in the first edition… it wasn’t until much, much …

Convergence -11-

Excised several panels – all the stuff between Raven and Raven – for plot reasons. Keeping them around when they have no bearing on what’s being talked about would be totally pointless… and besides, I need that headspace. I need it for WORDS. Good thing I never cropped the old pagefiles. Mastering notes, 2016.12.06 – Minor dialogue adjustments.

Convergence -10-

Had to move the photos around to fit the text… which is a partial recap of DCR highlights (highlights of scenes that have yet to be created at this point in time, unfortunately, but which have existed in outline for years). Note to self for future parts of the rewrite: LESS WITH THE TALKING, PLZ. Minor cleanup otherwise. Mastering notes, …

Convergence -9-

2009.07.20.01:07 – xeno just notified me that I’d somehow FORGOTTEN TO UPLOAD THIS PAGE. So, here it is! No substantial changes… unnecessary panel cutouts have been removied; the back of panel three was raised a bit, scale is more-or-less the same… and there’s a truckload more dialogue. So. Many. Words. When this scene was first written, the universe was a …

Convergence -8-

Making space for type again – the only line scaling here was in panel two… which probably wasn’t actually necessary, now that I look at it. My eye got hung up on the overlap between Raven and West, and I completely overlooked the fact that there’s nothing between Xand and Raven… so I could have scooted Xand left and everyone …

Convergence -7-

Pulled apart and extensively tweaked – replacement far-backgrounds in panels two and three followed by scaling (down) of Tantek and West in panel one and Tantek in panel three. Panel two has been built up to give Tantek some more headspace – all of this with an eye towards making enough room for the dialogue more than anything else. The …

Convergence -6-

Like the previous page, extensively reworked – in this case, some background buildup for panel two and a flat-out scale and tweak of the background for panel four. I’ve also tweaked the linework in three to make the veil transition look… well… more like a veil transition, starting with “in” on the left and “out” on the right. West actually …

Convergence -4-

Getting this one fixed was a lengthy exercise in un-fun. The biggest bit of un-fun was removing the publicity shot of the Z Machine I’d been using for the “back” of Xand’s diagnostic thinger – it makes the background look flatter, but it’s completely mine now – woot, woot. Also, any pretext of song lyrics is gone – I’ve learned …

Convergence -3-

Raven got a LOT more headspace, and the bottom “panel” has been scaled a bit… but not too much. The advantage of straight-photoshop backgrounds? They’re a lot more malleable than the 3d stuff. Continuity – Tantek’s optics now have the spiffy little side divots. While bits I’ve excised in Raven’s panels are still present in panels one and three, I …

Convergence -2-

More headspace for Raven in panel four, along with some basic cleanup and scrubbing. And continuity – pip! I’m pretty sure that’s the last one I forgot. I hope. Also background tweaks and overall replacement, a la the previous page. The huge increase in headspace really works here – for once I had an overblown amount of dialogue that I …

Commitment -6-

Was Convergence -1- in the first edition. I’ve sniped the first two pages of that scene (in terms of naming conventions, anyway), so now Convergence starts when Raven hits Oz Two. The “descent” of R & T was originally just a two page splurt to kick off that scene… since that bit was effectively expanded during the first First Edition …