20141215, 10:32 – The second page of the Naomi edit!

11:03 – Blurred the earth in panel one. Rummaged around and realized that panel two – Polaski – is a single layer, even in the oldest file. So no fix there; I’d need a time machine.

11:24 – Re-rendered panel three. Used the file for the previous shot and spun the viewport around until I got something that worked with most of the second edition dialogue placement and the scene as a whole. I compared it side-by-side with the previous page – 3.31 and 3.32 now flow a hell of a lot better than they ever have!

Second Edition Metadata

New compositions – one drives home the scale differences nicely, and two… yeah, there’s a lot of empty space, but I think it works. Again, it drives home the scale difference.


Mastering notes, 2016.12.06 – Minor dialogue adjustments.

Cast

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