To make everything fit reasonably, I did the first thing that came to mind – kept the doc’s background the original size and cropped the right side, then scaled the doc down to fit. There ought to be enough dialogue to make it work. I write this bit with the scene rewritten but without the type laid down – given how wordy the rewrite has become I figure the more space for dialogue, the better.

After laying in type, I’m glad things went that route – all that space-creating and it’s STILL cramped. Good thing the story gets a lot more monosyllabic in future chapters.


Mastering notes, 2016.12.06 – Minor dialogue adjustments. The dark side of the moon is now the far side of the moon.

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