Making space for type again – the only line scaling here was in panel two… which probably wasn’t actually necessary, now that I look at it. My eye got hung up on the overlap between Raven and West, and I completely overlooked the fact that there’s nothing between Xand and Raven… so I could have scooted Xand left and everyone else right. Despite all of that space-making, I still had to trim a couple of lines of dialogue… which is good, actually – we have a sub-scene break here and the trimmed lines neither lead into the next bit nor forward anything other than West’s contempt for his former coworkers.
Minor actual cleanup. To do more would be to invoke madness.
Mastering notes, 2016.12.06 – Minor dialogue adjustments.