Nothing short of a total redraw and reshade will unfuck this page… panel three, anyway. It sucks! Though with SOME hacking I was able to make Val look less dopey and more pissed, so… I suppose it’s an improvement. A minor tweak made for a MAJOR improvement to panel two, and panel four continues to be the “win” panel* for the page. Huzzah.
That said, the hair SFX and some more Energy Porn have been splattered in for effect. In the context of the past couple of pages, the end result – while not my best work by a long shot – gives a much stronger visual indication of what’s actually happening in the scene.
* I don’t recall giving voice to this before (though I almost certainly have), but it’s become obvious to me over time that every page of The Dualist has a Good Panel, a Crappy Panel, and a bunch of in-between panels. In this case, the crap is three and the win is four. For the next page, it’s three and four for the win. My overwhelming urge to raise the overall quality to “all wins” with no crap is one of the major reasons for this redux – while it’s plunged me into a seemingly endless purgatory of No Actual Progress, I am finally hacking away at all those little odds and ends that bug me every time I pull up a page. Some pages need more help than others, obviously… and fortunately, I feel no compulsion to do this with what’s been produced of Transitional Voices.